Squirrels: Watch Your Wordiness

I have a big example and a small example.

First, the big one. This is what one of you wrote:

Laura Ruffenboch, a wildlife professor at LCC, has attempted to shed some light as to why this odd set of circumstances has come about. Ruffenboch said that many electrical wires are made from soybean derivatives, making them attractive to squirrels.

Let's look at the first sentence. It's something I call an empty sentence, in which you're not saying anything. All you're saying is that there's something to say, and then you say the specifics in the next sentence.

So, why not get rid of that first sentence and move its full attribution to the second sentence, like this:

Laura Ruffenboch, a wildlife professor at LCC, said that many electrical wires are made from soybean derivatives, making them attractive to squirrels.

What's missing in terms of meaning and context and facts? Nothing. Just the wordiness is gone.

Now, here's a small example. Why say professor of English at LCC Oliver Brookes when you can reverse word order in the title and call him LCC English professor Oliver Brookes?