After talking about a back-and-forth between Layoux and the robber, this is what one of you wrote:
When he told him to get in the cooler, he shot him.
Uh, who shot who?
In situations where you have multiple players acting at once, it's best to go overboard on literal names and more specific identifers, like this:
When the robber told Layoux to get in the cooler, Layoux shot the robber.
Now there's no question or confusion or a reader having to guess. It's clear.
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