Did you need to cite the store's street address? Isn't that a basic and helpful identifier of WHERE this happened?
Wouldn't people wonder WHERE? Whether this was near their home? Or was the store they go to?
The
 lede probably won't have been a good place for that -- a first 
attribution simply as a Haslett convenience store, or a local O-Mart 
store would have been fine -- but an address with a subsequent 
attribution would have been helpful.
I'm just sayin'.
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