Like in a section of one lede:
. . . scientists from Michigan State University developed an idea that would bring these animals . . .
that's kinda run-on-ish. Why not replace something like, "developed an idea that would bring" with something more compact that says the same thing, like "propose bringing" or something like that?
But here you DID take one opportunity to shorten things, by referring to "ecologists and biologists" simply as "scientists." After all, both ecologists and biologists ARE scientists, right?
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