Rescue: Overall

Many people did very well with story structure, with ledes that got to end result and good nut grafs and decent narratives.

But one recurring problem was within the narratives, where some of us failed to answer a basic question: how do we know all this?

How do we know the boy died? How do we know a tunnel collapsed on him? How do we know he was taken to the Regional Medical Center? How do we know neighbors were angry?

It's because we learned all that from the East Lansing Fire Department report we read.

So, a proper first reference would have been to just that: an East Lansing Fire Department report said.

Subsequent references would simply have been, the fire department report said or the report said.

At a minimum, attribution should have been in EVERY paragraph after the lede. And because this story came entirely from a single source, we wouldn't have been wrong to include attribution in the lede, since the lede is entirely based on information from one source, as opposed to a more typical amalgamation of information from various sources.

Make sure your audience knows where you got your information!