A few of you never named the robber. Why in earth wouldn't you?
I mean, the name is central to the story: WHO robbed the store. WHO was shot dead. Right?
Don't forget to include all the five W's (who, what, when, where, why) and the one H that accompanies it (how).
Others
failed to name the robber until very late in the story, after
generically referring to a gunman repeatedly in the story. Ideally,
you'd want to ID the robber no later than the nut graf -- since WHO did the robbing and WHO was killed was a very major W among the 5 W's -- and go from there.
Just
like you didn't wait to identify Layoux by name, don't wait to ID
people who are considered central to the story. A person killed whose
actions triggered everything else that happened -- Layoux having to use
his gun, Layoux losing his job as a result -- isn't a bit player whose
name can wait until later, like the district attorney or a cop who
showed up after everything was over.
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