Bicyclist: Be Compact With Words

Like in this passage:

In the hospital, doctors confirmed that she had gotten a mild concussion, a broken neck, six broken ribs, a broken arm and a broken pelvis.

That's a lot of repetition with the word broken. You use it four times in one sentence! Why not look to use that term just once and in connection with a number of injuries, like this:

In the hospital, doctors confirmed that she had gotten a mild concussion and broke her neck, six ribs, an arm and her pelvis.

A bit more compact and concise, right?

Whenever you have a graf where you use the same word or term repeatedly, look for ways to end the "echo" and use the word in a more efficient manner.