Murder: Say What You Mean, Mean What You Say

In one passage, you wrote this:

Cortez said it was like any other day; she and Blohm were the only two usually there that early in the morning.

That's not exactly right. It started out like any other day, then it went horribly wrong. But that's not what you say; you say it was like any other day. Presumably that means a cook gets murdered every morning.

That's not what you meant, right? So be precise.

Say what you mean, and mean what you say. Use the right words at the right times to project an exact and accurate meaning.