Look at this sentence:
The coalition asked that the site be valued at $500,000 and then they would raise $1.5 million that they needed to construct the shelter.
Now, look at this sentence:
The coalition asked the site be valued at $500,000 and then they would raise $1.5 million they needed to construct the shelter.
Is there any difference, except for the removal of two references to "that"?
Quite often, "that" is unnecessary. Try removing "that" and see if your sentences still read as complete sentences. If so, leave "that" out.
In many of your graded returned assignments, I've scratced out your uses of "that." See how those deletions don't change anything.
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