Wednesday, October 13, 2010

Bicyclist -- What is the news . . .

. . . in this lede?

Long-time bicyclist Marsha Taylor spoke this morning following her release from a four-month-long hospital stay after a bicycling accident nearly left her paralyzed.

The lede tells me that the news is that she spoke. But that's not the news; the news is what she said, right?

Think back to the football story situation we often talked about at the start of this semester. The news from a football game isn't that a game was played; it's what happened at the game; who won or lost, and why.

Borrowing from some of the other ledes, I'd say the news was that she said was anxious to start riding again. So a better version of this lede could be something like this:

Long-time bicyclist Marsha Taylor said she is anxious to ride again following her release from a four-month-long hospital stay after a bicycling accident nearly left her paralyzed.

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