This was one of your grafs:
But why are the squirrels attacking our cars?
That's a no-no. Avoid first-person construction; as journalists, we are not part of the stories we write. So there is no "our" or "us" or "I" (unless, of course, a first person account is precisely the specialized type of story you're working on. Which you won't be in this class).
So what to do? Consider your story subjects. It's LCC, right?
So, why not say, But why are squirrels attacking cars at LCC?
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